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Old 08-05-2011, 08:47 AM   #1
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This is a project I've been working on and I need some feedback. Please feel free to tell me what you think. Thanks!

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For such a vertical character, I'd prefer to see him in a vertical composition. As well as shining some bounce light on the wall behind him, to light the environment a little.

Also as far as the pose and expression go, if you're shooting for the devious cunning sort of look, I'd lean him forward instead of backwards, like Clopin from the Hunchback of Notre Dame
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Old 07-06-2011, 02:55 PM   #3
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I don't know, what does everyone else think?
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I actually think that the 'landscape' type of composition has greater potential, it just feels a bit empty at the moment. Is that your final composition or are you still adding stuff?

Imho, it needs more objects added to help establish depth (foreground/mid/back ground) and a more interesting composition in general, (maybe have those work with or against the line of action that your character has.) At the moment the window shape doesn't seem to work very well with the character - at least as it is on its own.

As for the pose and expression of the character - it looks pretty spot on to me ((I remember that candlestick character from some Disney cartoon, and I think it actually had the very same pose and all; - it's posing or presenting something and just being dramatic about it.))
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Reminded me also on Disney productions at first glance (especially the pose evoking memories on the brooms of The Sorcerer's Apprentice). The character looks very good in my eyes, except maybe the mouth area at the shown viewing angle - not 100% clear what are lips or tongue.

Agree a bit with the critique about the interior. The outlines of the window look rather simple regarding the style and the room is quite empty to convey the feel of the era.
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Imho, it needs more objects added to help establish depth (foreground/mid/back ground) and a more interesting composition in general
I completely agree. I actually thought it would be cool to have a big support column from the castle in the FG, char in mid, and windows/walls BG.

Another idea is to put him on the table from the movie, with all sorts of props aiding depth. It could even be kinda cool, like there are all sorts of props that look kinda like him, but he's the only one that's alive and is an actual character
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